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A SINNER'S SONNET
Growing Pains
What instinct that was nursed in tender years,
Inside this warm and happy home of mine,
Lurks underneath a flood of uncried tears?
Laid little hands to flesh? Apt art refined.
Each victim has purpose in life restored,
A final service is given for me,
So they might look upon a higher Lord,
Eyes wide as does', I'm the last God they'll see.
Inside I pay the Reaper's gruesome toll,
No, it's not right to tremble in this way.
To seal the ruptures of my fractured soul,
I poise as predator above my prey.
Mock baby-dolls so soft and starry eyed,
Each one most alive just before they died.
Growing Pains
What instinct that was nursed in tender years,
Inside this warm and happy home of mine,
Lurks underneath a flood of uncried tears?
Laid little hands to flesh? Apt art refined.
Each victim has purpose in life restored,
A final service is given for me,
So they might look upon a higher Lord,
Eyes wide as does', I'm the last God they'll see.
Inside I pay the Reaper's gruesome toll,
No, it's not right to tremble in this way.
To seal the ruptures of my fractured soul,
I poise as predator above my prey.
Mock baby-dolls so soft and starry eyed,
Each one most alive just before they died.
Description
I wrote this for submittance in my Adv. Higher English folio and thought I might as well share it. People say that anyone can write a sonnet, and they are not as daunting as they might seem at first - but let me tell you, this took a long time to organise and get right. Of course, there are certain things within the poem that made it difficult, but these are what makes me particularly proud of it. Poetry is a disciplined art, and if you are aiming to actually construct and fashion a decent poem it cannot simply be reeled off. All things must be considered, tweaked and changed to make it better. There is always room for improvement, and there is here too - that is why this is subject to extreme change depending on when I notice something I don't like. Inspired by watching too many Ted Bundy interviews, haha, enjoy!
Critique
'Growing Pains' is a sonnet following a traditional Shakespearean form, though it also has an acrostic quality in that the letters down the left hand side of the poem read a continuance of the title - 'will ease in time'. The structure is a typical 'ABAB CDCD EFEF GG' and the iambic pentameter has been followed religiously with 10 syllables per line, 'five feet' of two syllables with the first unstressed and the second stressed. It does not dwell on subjects usually addressed in typical sonnets.
This particular sonnet centres on the musings of a serial killer. I tried to include some references to development at early life and how the predatory instinct grows and becomes more prominent. While there is extensive analysis written on this piece I don't think I could transfer it all up here effectively as it is referenced line by line. So, rather than having to think and pick it apart too much, don't take it at face value but appreciate for what it is - the reflection of a rather disjointed and unsound mind.
I wrote this for submittance in my Adv. Higher English folio and thought I might as well share it. People say that anyone can write a sonnet, and they are not as daunting as they might seem at first - but let me tell you, this took a long time to organise and get right. Of course, there are certain things within the poem that made it difficult, but these are what makes me particularly proud of it. Poetry is a disciplined art, and if you are aiming to actually construct and fashion a decent poem it cannot simply be reeled off. All things must be considered, tweaked and changed to make it better. There is always room for improvement, and there is here too - that is why this is subject to extreme change depending on when I notice something I don't like. Inspired by watching too many Ted Bundy interviews, haha, enjoy!
Critique
'Growing Pains' is a sonnet following a traditional Shakespearean form, though it also has an acrostic quality in that the letters down the left hand side of the poem read a continuance of the title - 'will ease in time'. The structure is a typical 'ABAB CDCD EFEF GG' and the iambic pentameter has been followed religiously with 10 syllables per line, 'five feet' of two syllables with the first unstressed and the second stressed. It does not dwell on subjects usually addressed in typical sonnets.
This particular sonnet centres on the musings of a serial killer. I tried to include some references to development at early life and how the predatory instinct grows and becomes more prominent. While there is extensive analysis written on this piece I don't think I could transfer it all up here effectively as it is referenced line by line. So, rather than having to think and pick it apart too much, don't take it at face value but appreciate for what it is - the reflection of a rather disjointed and unsound mind.
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